Correction of English essay

Wrong sentence: "I had never felt so alone much before."
Right sentence: "I had never felt so alone before."

Wrong sentence: "I got up and putted some clothes on, just some random, nobody cared anyway."
Right sentence: "I got up and took some clothes on, just some random, nobody cared anyway."

Wrong sentence: "What I saw was a middle tall, black haired girl, with a normal weight."
Right sentence: "What I saw, was a middle tall black haired girl, with a normal weight."

Wrong sentence: "I starred pretty much at them,"
Right sentence: "I stared pretty much at them,"

Wrong sentence: "dahm"
Right sentence: "damn"

Wrong sentence: "Our teacher told us that there was a upcoming party. Where you could come alone or with a date."
Right sentence: "Our teacher told us that there was an upcoming party, where you could come alone or with a date."

Wrong sentence: "But do it at all mater? You can’t possible have time for you big family, your work and a date to the party.”"
Right sentence: "But does it matter? You can’t possible have time for your big family, your work and a date to the party."

Wrong sentence: "“Why?” did I heard my own voice say."
Right sentence: "“Why?” I heard a voice say, it was my own"

Olympic games mindmap

These are the things, which comes through my mind, when I'm thinking Olympic games.